The art of developing believable characters

Pile of BooksCharacterisation is at the heart of any really good story as far as I’m concerned. Real people dealing with real situations. Or sometimes (as in speculative fiction) not-real situations. That’s when creating believable characters becomes absolutely crucial. If your characters aren’t believable, your reader won’t relate to them.

I recently read a SF romance book (Linnea Sinclair, “Games of Command”) that has stayed in my mind ever since. Because of the brilliant characterisation. I’ve re-read parts of the book several times. Yes, you’re right; one was the Big Sex Scene. But not for any cheap, auto-erotic thrill. Rather, it was because of the wonderful way she has portrayed her male protagonist, a cyber-enhanced admiral. Finally, after all those years, he’s going to actually live his fantasy with the woman of his dreams. Please understand this man is a leader, on top of his game (pardon the pun) in the military. But when he’s faced with the reality of getting his gear off and making love to her, every anxiety, every imagined inadequacy he ever had, comes to the surface. And it really is so totally believable. I felt for this guy, I really did.

How do you do it? I don’t know. I don’t use people I know as characters in my books. Sure, I think about how people I know might react in a given circumstance to give me a clue about what somebody might do. But I can honestly say, hand on heart, that if anyone I know recognises him/herself as a character in my work, he/she is deluding him/herself.

What I do use is Allan and Barbara Pease’s excellent book “The Definitive Book of Body Language” to try to sort out how people might react in a given situation. Another useful tool is the Myers-Briggs personality types. There are many, many websites. This is just one. Now you might be like me and think the whole Myers-Briggs thing is eyewash, but it actually can give you some great ideas on combining personality traits into one coherent person.

I’d love to know what other people do in their quest for a believable character.

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Reflections on rejection

Holding Glasses over bookThis is going to be perhaps a more personal post than my usual offerings. But yet another rejection has that effect on most of us. Writing is such a very personal thing – or it is for me. My books have a lot of emotion in them. I expect a clever analyst could find out a lot about me from my writing. So when one gets yet another rejection… it hurts.

Oh, I know they’re not rejecting ME. My book hasn’t worked for them for whatever reason. But let me tell you, an impersonal, routine rejection of a query is much, much easier to bear than a rejection of a whole ms.

So I navel-gaze. And I reflect.

Is it my best work? Well, yes. I’m not saying it can’t be better, mind. It sure as hell isn’t a first draft. Or a second or third. My trusted beta-readers approved. Even Ms Agent said she liked the plot. And the fact that she allowed me to send the entire ms without even a query tells me she thinks I can write. Besides, I’ve had some excellent reviews on my published novel. So I don’t think I need to flay myself on my ability to tell a story. She just wasn’t sold on the story itself.

So do I change the story? I’ve already done that and I thought I did a good job. Refer back to beta-readers. If anything, they thought I’d streamlined a little too much, taken out some of the explanatory details. I can look at that.

And at the end of the day, one person has passed on the book. Others liked it. Plenty of people passed on famous books and authors. I’ve read whole lists of them. Here’s one list of rejections to warm the cockles of the heart.

So I guess I’m shrugging my shoulders and moving on. One day when I’m famous, I hope a few people out there in publishing are going to be kicking themselves.

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How photography can improve your writing

Sea and cloudsI like taking pictures. Have done for a long time and of course, in this digital age it’s even easier. Since I’ve been writing, photography has become more than just a way of making something pretty (or interesting) to look at. I’ve become a voyeur. Yes, that’s a good word. I look at details; consider how to describe things, note how light plays on the object of my interest, perhaps what it sounds like. I try to find the words that go with the image. How would I express myself if I was describing this scene in a book?

Take this one. The molten metal sea reflects the clouds, a whitish glimmer on scarcely moving water. Follow the curved blue line of the sky from the deep azure of the zenith towards the paler blue of the horizon, where a boat bobs, while nearby the shadow of our vessel lends a deeper green to the languid swirl of the waves. Further away a heavier cloud mass, mottled and angry, betrays a change – but perhaps not just yet.

So it’s more than just an image. You break down the elements of the image and then assign importance to those elements as you search for the words to use so that if the photo isn’t there, the reader still has enough information to paint their own picture in their heads.

Since it’s a book about a shipwreck, seascapes are an important feature of ‘Die a Dry Death’. I’ve done my best to convey those scenes through my words. Many people have told me the book is very visual – so my writing worked.

Try it for yourself. Take pictures of scenes – any scenes that might work in your writing – and then describe them in words. You’ll find it isn’t easy but it’s certainly worthwhile.

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‘Truth’ in historical fiction

Shipwreck‘Die a Dry Death’ is certainly not the first and will not be the last, novel written about the loss of the Batavia in 1629. I recently had an email conversation with somebody who knows the history well and it got me thinking about the idea of ‘truth’ in history.

You see, conventional history states that the Batavia’s captain, Adriaen Jacobsz, plotted with Jeronimus Cornelisz as far back as when the ship called in at Table Bay to kill Commandeur Pelsaert, steal the vessel and make a fortune from piracy. Pelsaert’s journal includes his summary of the events that took place on the Abrolhos Islands, where Cornelisz and his thugs murdered around one hundred men, women and children. The executive summary hinges around the planned ‘mutiny’ by the skipper and despite his undeniable seamanship in getting the overloaded longboat to the city of Batavia without loss, Jacobsz is remembered as the architect of disaster and some go so far as to suggest that Cornelisz’s behaviour stemmed from Jacobsz.

I have always found that argument difficult to believe, for the following reasons:

  • Pelsaert and Jacobsz hated each other. Pelsaert would have readily believed the captain guilty of anything.
  • Evidence was extracted using torture and it’s easy enough to answer loaded questions with the expected answer.
  • If Jacobsz intended (with Cornelisz) to kill Pelsaert they had plenty of opportunity on the voyage (accidental fall overboard) or when Pelsaert was ill. Cornelisz was an apothecary, after all. Or even in the longboat. You could even ask why Jacobsz took him in the longboat at all.
  • Cornelisz was a liar and completely without conscience. He blamed everybody else and lied through his teeth to get out of everything. It was he who testified to the plot between him and Jacobsz at Table Bay, he said Zwaantie was a tart, he said Jacobsz offered Lucretia gold to sleep with him. He’d say anything to avoid torture, too.
  • The main players apart from Cornelisz were already dead before the journal was written and couldn’t defend themselves.
  • Pelsaert executed most of the more important of Cornelisz’s gang before returning to Batavia, so they couldn’t be interviewed, either.
  • We know what happened to all the members of Cornelisz’s gang who were returned to Batavia, so it seems odd to me, given their idea of justice, that Jacobsz was not put to death immediately and that his fate is unknown.

To a point, the journal itself is a work of fiction. I do not doubt that Pelsaert did his best to record the known facts and the interviews with the murderers. But it certainly wasn’t a transcript of a trial in the modern sense. And I have no doubt that Pelsaert had an eye on the person who would read the account – the formidable Governor of the Indies, Jan Pieterszoon Coen.

So my book is that little bit different. I applied a ‘what if’ question. What if the captain was innocent of a planned mutiny? Can the events recorded in the journal be interpreted in this way without fiddling with the facts? I felt it could and I guess my efforts were successful. One reviewer who knows the history described the book as a dramatisation, rather than fiction, which is exactly what I tried to achieve.

That’s the wonderful thing about history. We can (and should) reconsider events and what they meant. But of course, we’ll never know for sure.

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The third law of writing

Darth VaderNewton’s third law states that every action has an equal and opposite reaction. One of the laws of writing should be that for every hero there must be an equal and opposite villain. Because if you don’t have a powerful villain, you don’t have a conflict. And conflict drives novels. Maybe not all novels, but certainly the ones I write.

If you have a kid with almost magical powers and a light sabre, you have to have an adult with those same magical powers and a bigger light sabre. If you have a dragon slayer you must have a big, bad dragon. The nine riders and the nine ring-bearers, Gandalf and Sauron. Flash Gordon and the Emperor Ming. You get the picture.

Often villains are fascinating characters. You might not like them but they’re interesting in a way that heroes can’t be. We wonder what makes them tick, why they’re like that. Star Wars iconic villain Darth Vader was so well introduced it took my breath away. A ship under siege, hunted down by a star destroyer that seemed to go on forever (yes, I ducked). There’s a brief battle, the goodies lose. And then this… being arrives. Black body armour, black cloak, black death’s head mask. And rasping breathing. Whoa. There’s something seriously wrong with this dude. And he’s nasty, nasty, nasty. Breaks a man’s neck with his hand. And all this in the first few minutes of the film.

Yes, okay the heroine is a smart-mouthed princess in a white dress (black vs white, get it?). But once we see Darth Vader, we get an idea of the odds stacked up against the wide-eyed farm boy and we start to feel some sympathy for him. And of course, Darth was very, very popular with the women. Tall, dark and powerful, quite a few ladies fantasised about ripping that mask off. There are still several websites dedicated to the original Star Wars villain and it is Darth who provides the impetus for all six movies.

So when you’re crafting your novel, make sure your villain comes up to scratch. Make sure Superman has a Lex Luthor with a piece of Kryptonite, Batman has The Joker. Because if your hero doesn’t have to battle the odds, who cares?

Any examples of villains you’d like to share?

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What is ‘time’?

Hourglass and ShadowTime. It’s an illusion, you know. Something we’ve invented to keep track of greater events in the Cosmos. Earth spins on its axis in what we call a day, which we have chosen to break up into smaller units called hours. Earth moves around Sol, rotating on its axis three hundred and sixty five times. And a bit. Our planet’s moon moves around Earth, refecting light from Sol onto the Earth. How much light depends upon the geometric relationship between the Moon and Sol, moving from full moon through gibbous, quarter, right through to no light at all in a regular cycle. We call those cycles ‘months’. More or less. Sort of.

We are so obsessed with the minutiae of our existence we forget that time is nothing more than a reference point. (Meet you at Starbuck’s at 10.) And when you’re writing science fiction, time becomes even more problematical. On Earth we have created for ourselves an imaginery line which is the base line for time. It passes through Greenwich in UK. Why? Well, just because. The English started it, so they had first dibs. So when it’s twelve midnight (ie the beginning of the day) in UK, it is 10am of the following day where I live. You think that’s hard? (I know some of you do)

Well, when we talk about more than one planet, we’ll need some sort of celestial equivalent to Greenwich so we can agree on what the ‘time’ is. Planets spin at different rates, so their ‘day’ will be different. For example, the length of a day on Mars is 24 hours 39 minutes. Pretty close to our day. But a Mars year is 687 of our days. Let’s look at mighty Jupiter, much much larger than Earth. In fact, Jupiter is so big that all the other planets in the solar system would fit inside it. Jupiter’s day is 9.8 of our hours. Yes, that is nine point eight. Its year is 11.86 of our years.

So if we eventually colonise Mars, we’ll have to have some way of equating time on the two worlds. Sure, mainly you’ll work in local time. But let’s say somebody signs a mining lease on Earth for property on Mars. When does the lease expire?

So there you are. When you agree to meet someone for coffee, you set a spatial reference – ie latitude and longitude and then you add time. So whether you knew it or not, you’ve understood spacetime all along. Easy.

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The give and take of Feedback

Reading glassesFeedback from readers is worth its weight in gold. Or maybe platinum or Yttrium. Isn’t it? Well, maybe. And then again, maybe not.

Whenever I do crits I’m at pains to make the point that what I’m giving is my point of view, my opinion. Nothing more, nothing less. It’s up to the writer to act on what s/he is given to work with. I guess we all know that but sometimes it’s very easy to respond to somebody’s comment just because we can. I know in my case, I over-edited the opening chapter of Die a Dry Death because of a series of comments on Authonomy. Fortunately, I had an editor who suggested I put it back the way it was.

One thing to remember about opinions is that some really are worth more than others. People who read the genre, writers who have a similar style, people who’ll take the time to read thoroughly and think through their feedback. And of course, those who’ll be honest without being derogatory.

But there are some types of feedback I will take note of every time – what I do, having taken note, is another matter. Please, please tell me if you read a section of my work and think…

Time line: ‘Eh? How’s that possible? The hero only just left Timbuktu.”

Plot holes: ‘Er… how could she possibly know that?’

Out of character: ‘He’s going to do WHAT? You’ve gotta be kidding.’

Implausible: ‘That’s a bit hard to believe.’

Transition: ‘Eh? How did we get here?’

The most valuable feedback of all? What you get back from an agent who passes on a full but takes the time to tell you what they did and did not like. That really is Yttrium.

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Researching a historical novel

Batavia ship in silhouetteOn account of beng busy finishing my latest book, I haven’t got it in me to blog. But friend and fellow historical fiction writer Gemi Sasson asked me to write a guest blog about my research for my hist fic novel Die a Dry Death.  Check it out here.

You might also like to take a look at the book trailer.

While you’re at it, take a look at her wonderful book The Crown in the Heather, the first of a trilogy about Rober the Bruce. You’ll find reviews of that book on Amazon here.

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The perils of backstory

Alien cityI’m busy at the moment doing some massive rewrites of early work and I’ve also spent some time doing some beta-reading. And backstory is the thing that sticks out.

I think one of the hardest lessons for a writer to learn is ‘what does my reader need to know?’ And that is particularly true for chapter one. When you’re first starting off in this writing game you tend to want to create your world first, tell all about your MC, so everybody is facing the same way. This is particularly true, I think, in SF and Fantasy, where you can’t just say “New York, September 2001”. You tend to want to tell people that this is the year 3000 and that the Galaxy has a decaying Republic. Subversive forces are scheming to find a way to overthrow the republic and put in place an elitist, pro-Human autocracy. It’s a bit like those little prompts that walk up the screen at the start of the Star Wars movies.

I’ll let you in on a secret. Your reader doesn’t need to know that. No, really. They just want to see the farm boy and the droids and the weird old man. Oh, and the princess with the strange hairdo. And that big, spooky villain who breathes funny.

I’m not saying backstory isn’t important. It’s vital. Backstory gives your writing depth. YOU need to know where your MC went to school or (as in my case) how he relates to his mum. YOU need to know why he is the way he is because that will dictate how he behaves. But your reader just wants to read the story. So if it’s not in the plot, toss it out. Or if you must, tell people in offhand ways.

Backstory is often presented as the author telling the reader. Eg “Blackrock was created during the mining boom of the seventies but now the mining company has withdrawn  it is beginning to deteriorate.” But you can show your reader the effects – which is probably all s/he cares about. Boarded up shop fronts, peeling paint, only one of the five pubs still operational.

So… the lesson is show don’t tell. And only show what you need to show to tell your story. Yes’m. Getting straight on down and doing that, ‘m.

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An author’s view of how readers interpreted his work

I have been musing on how my book comes across to others. I wrote it. Until it went off to the printers it was mine. Now, of course, it belongs to whoever bought it and my opinion of what I wrote hardly matters anymore. But I still find it intriguing. Four people have reviewed ‘Die a Dry Death’ and a number of others have commented on sections of the story. It’s fascinating how people have interpreted my intention. Does this mean I didn’t write it well enough? Maybe. Or maybe it’s just that people interpret what they read according to their own lights.

May I quote from the redoubtable Professor Tolkien, whose book has been read by many, many more folk than will ever venture into Die a Dry Death.

This is from the foreword of my own much-battered India-paper edition of The Lord of the Rings, published in 1969, printed in 1974.

The Lord of the Rings has been read by many people since it finally appeared in print fifteen years ago; and I should like to say something here with reference to the many opinions or guesses that I have received or have read concerning the motives and meaning of the tale. The prime motive was the desire of a tale-teller to try his hand at a really long story that would hold the attention of readers, amuse them, delight them, and at times maybe excite them or deeply move them. As a guide I had only my own feelings for what is appealing or moving, and for many the guide was inevitably often at fault. Some who have read the book, or at any rate have reviewed it, have found it boring, absurd, or contemptible; and I have no cause to complain, since I have similar opinions of their works, or of the kinds of writing that they evidently prefer. But even from the points of view of many who have enjoyed my story there is much that fails to please. It is perhaps not possible in a long tale to please everybody at all points, nor to displease everybody at the same points; for I find from the letters that I have received that the passages or chapters that are to some a blemish are all by others specially approved. The most critical reader of all, myself, now finds many defects, minor and major, but being fortunately under no obligation either to review the book or to write it again, he will pass over these in silence, except one that has been noted by others: the book is too short.

As for any inner meaning or ‘message’, it has in the intention of the author none. It is neither allegorical nor topical. As the story grew it put down roots (into the past) and threw out unexpected branches:
but its main theme was settled from the outset by the inevitable choice of the Ring as the link between it and The Hobbit. The crucial chapter, ‘The Shadow of the Past’, is one of the oldest parts of the tale. It was written long before the foreshadow of 1939 had yet become a threat of inevitable disaster, and from that point the story would have developed along essentially the same lines, if that disaster had been averted. Its sources are things long before in mind, or in some cases already written, and little or nothing in it was modified by the war that began in 1939 or its sequels.

The real war does not resemble the legendary war in its process or its conclusion. If it had inspired or directed the development of the legend, then certainly the Ring would have been seized and used against Sauron; he would not have been annihilated but enslaved, and Barad-dur would not have been destroyed but occupied. Saruman, failing to get possession of the Ring, would in the confusion and treacheries of the time have found in Mordor the missing links in his own researches into Ring-lore, and before long he would have made a Great Ring of his own with which to challenge the self-styled Ruler of Middle-earth. In that conflict both sides would have held hobbits in hatred and contempt: they would not long have survived even as slaves.

Other arrangements could be devised according to the tastes or views of those who like allegory or topical reference. But I cordially dislike allegory in all its manifestations, and always have done so since I grew old and wary enough to detect its presence. I much prefer history, true or feigned, with its varied applicability to the thought and experience of readers. I think that many confuse ‘applicability’ with ‘allegory’; but the one resides in the freedom of the reader, and the other in the purposed domination of the author.”

There’s got to be something in there for everyone to ponder.

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